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The Plan
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9 years 2 weeks ago - 9 years 2 weeks ago #148787
by NalickDeMarche
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The Plan was created by NalickDeMarche
((OOG: The following is written in elegant cursive))
Fear is an art not yet perfected,
A feat which cannot go neglected.
And so I've decided to put to the test
Those you've not yet groomed to beat their chest.
What my plan entails, you will soon receive a hint,
Paid for with not too much more than some mere pocket lint
Beginning in a town where estranged family dwells,
In public mockery, the hottest of all the hells,
Pretending to sup on wine in silence while the town abides
But is it he who holds the sword or holds the gold decides?
We begin to answer the very query in the home of the headstrong
While you ask yourselves the question... what could possibly go wrong?
~The Artist
Fear is an art not yet perfected,
A feat which cannot go neglected.
And so I've decided to put to the test
Those you've not yet groomed to beat their chest.
What my plan entails, you will soon receive a hint,
Paid for with not too much more than some mere pocket lint
Beginning in a town where estranged family dwells,
In public mockery, the hottest of all the hells,
Pretending to sup on wine in silence while the town abides
But is it he who holds the sword or holds the gold decides?
We begin to answer the very query in the home of the headstrong
While you ask yourselves the question... what could possibly go wrong?
~The Artist
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Last edit: 9 years 2 weeks ago by NalickDeMarche.
9 years 2 weeks ago #148797
by kuemanner
Given what we just went through with the Living Paint situation, count me intrigued, "artist." It is not often we have such bizarre poetry left on our notice board.
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9 years 2 weeks ago #148815
by Bran MacInnes
"What do you take me for? Some kind of big damn hero?"
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"What, it's for my research, I swear!"
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"Here, kid, suck on this and shut up for a while."
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Replied by Bran MacInnes on topic The Plan
Observe, good folk, a mysterious poet
Whom through simplistic rhymes presumes to know it all
But only proves their talent to be small
And their mastery of words to be weak
This fool makes public a threat
To those whom are seen as being wet behind their ears
And pontificates upon the topic of fears
As if presuming their intended prey to be meek
So I would urge you to move on
No one would notice you were gone
Your verse simply begs
To have you sent home, tail tucked 'twixt your legs
As I continue my literary roasting streak
-S
Whom through simplistic rhymes presumes to know it all
But only proves their talent to be small
And their mastery of words to be weak
This fool makes public a threat
To those whom are seen as being wet behind their ears
And pontificates upon the topic of fears
As if presuming their intended prey to be meek
So I would urge you to move on
No one would notice you were gone
Your verse simply begs
To have you sent home, tail tucked 'twixt your legs
As I continue my literary roasting streak
-S
"What do you take me for? Some kind of big damn hero?"
Sergei Petsho, Voivode and Steward of Inovar, Owner and Masseur Extraordinaire of Magic Hands Massage.
"What, it's for my research, I swear!"
Nigel Whitworth, Gentleman Apothecary
"Here, kid, suck on this and shut up for a while."
Aengus MacAengus Hesperus, Professional Old Person
OOG: Chris Zipeto
Storyteller
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9 years 2 weeks ago #148839
by TheArchMage
Replied by TheArchMage on topic The Plan
I find it is quite clear to me that you are lacking lyrically
I imagine there's more you'll be lacking
By testing those with Travancian backing
However, I am intrigued by ye who fiddles with riddles
Even though your 'plan' is shite in the middle of worthless drivel
I'll end this with a warning, I've got no need to pro-long
Bring us harm and I will show you what can go wrong.
P.S.: Your third to last line makes no sense grammatically, but it would alter the flow if you were to add another word. Your use of metaphoric rhetoric throughout the piece does slightly make up for it, however. I'm not entirely sure why I'm critiquing you, but it's a lot better than cowering in the fear you mention in your opening stanza, isn't it?
I imagine there's more you'll be lacking
By testing those with Travancian backing
However, I am intrigued by ye who fiddles with riddles
Even though your 'plan' is shite in the middle of worthless drivel
I'll end this with a warning, I've got no need to pro-long
Bring us harm and I will show you what can go wrong.
P.S.: Your third to last line makes no sense grammatically, but it would alter the flow if you were to add another word. Your use of metaphoric rhetoric throughout the piece does slightly make up for it, however. I'm not entirely sure why I'm critiquing you, but it's a lot better than cowering in the fear you mention in your opening stanza, isn't it?
9 years 2 weeks ago #148842
by Selrik
The young in season he puts to the test,
upon this moon of Valor's Rest.
If thee be older it may be wise,
to give the youth here a chance to rise.
To the artist, our young to vex,
careful be of purposed text.
For if Travance has done one thing,
its defeating Evil and the curse it brings.
In all may Valos watch and guide,
that thee all may work against his studied jest.
Our newest residents this Feast shall provide,
proof this artist is merely a pest.
So come and call upon our young,
for it is you, not them, who will be hung.
upon this moon of Valor's Rest.
If thee be older it may be wise,
to give the youth here a chance to rise.
To the artist, our young to vex,
careful be of purposed text.
For if Travance has done one thing,
its defeating Evil and the curse it brings.
In all may Valos watch and guide,
that thee all may work against his studied jest.
Our newest residents this Feast shall provide,
proof this artist is merely a pest.
So come and call upon our young,
for it is you, not them, who will be hung.
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